The Perfect Date
Here is something cool. Lindsey and I wrote this on November 27th, 2005. I would write one or two lines, and then she would write 1-2 more lines, and we switched off, until we made this story. It's probably full of errors, I've been too lazy correct the mistakes.
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The Perfect Date By: Lindsey Bartell Mikael Laporte
She barges through the door and jumps on her bed, and cries with glee. she picks up her puppy, butters--and then she grabs the phone to call her one and only true friend, Mary. She tells Mary all about her date with Lew. but Mary sue was really quiet over the phone because she had a secret crush on Lew, but Ava doesn't know. "That sound's awesome!" Mary responded. "What's the matter, you sound different?" "Oh nothing, just a bad day at school I guess" Mary responded. "Talk To Me!" Ava half squealed, still excited from the conversation with the boy of her dreams. Mary says "Nevermind..I hope you have a great date with Lew" and *click* she hung up on Ava. Ava shrugs and tosses the phone away from her. She gets up to decide on what to wear and to plan on how to sneak out of the house, past her parents. As she picked her dress, she thought back to the conversation she had with Lew. It was a strange conversation--Lew was acting all standoffish and shy. Could mean nothing, so Ava shoved the memory to the back of her head. Before she knew it, it was midnight and her parents were asleep. She opened her window and looked down to finds Mary at the bottom, hissing for her to come down. Ava was confused. What was Mary doing here? "I got to tell you something, get down here!" she hissed. Ava hoisted herself down and walk towards Mary. "What is it?" Mary shuffles her feet uncomfortably and says, "Lew's bad news--i don't want you to go out with him, pleassseee!" Ava thought to herself 'Mary's just jealous, i won't let her stop me.' Ava snapped, "Mary, stop worrying about me, you're not my mother" and shoves her aside. She stomped out to the drive way to find Lew relaxed, laying on his car, smoking a cigarette 2 blocks down. She wanted to shout out to him, but, caught herself, for she didn’t want to awaken her parents and ruin the night ahead. So she walked to the car, freezing to death and extremely annoyed at Mary. "Hey Lew!" Lew jumped, saw Ava, somehow managed to lose his footing on the ground, and fell on his butt. Ava ran to him laughing, thinking in the back of her head, “He’s harmless!”. Lew's face turned red as a lobster. He weakly laughs it off. he puts out his cigarette, pops the collar of his leather jacket and goes to open the door of his old car for Ava. While Lew was going around to his side, Ava took a quick look around his car and she finds an empty bottle of Red Wine. "Lew?". "Yeah, baby?". "Have you been drinking?". "No, why?" Lew asks with an innocent face. Ava points to the back of the car. "Oh, I'm sorry, this is my brother's car". "Oh....", Ava was quite for a while..."Can I ask you a favor?" Lew looked at her. "Sure". "I'm really sorry to ask you this but can I smell your breath? I'm sooo sorry, I just have trust issues...". "Sure, it's no problem". He leaned over from the driver's seat. His face was close to her's. Ava's heartbeat accelerated. He was getting closer. Her breathing deepened. Crazy thoughts were running through her head. "Could this be real?" she thought. "Is this really happening?" They were close enough to kiss, but would they? She so wanted to! …But no, instead, he blew his breath in her face. she backed away in disgust. it was the combination of liquor and garlic. Before she could say "Let me out, you're drunk," Lew wildly gunned the car down the street. Ava shouted at the top of her lungs "LET ME OUT!" and started hitting Lew on the shoulder. Lew struck her, and she backed off into her corner, sobbing. "Your gonna like it where I'm taking you!" and laughed. What seemed like for hours they drove, until he stopped the car in a wooded area, nothing to be seen but a cabin. He got out to ava's side of the car to try to pull her out--but ava was being difficult to him--she wouldn't get out, so lew had no choice but to yank her out by the hair. She screamed as she fell out, sobbing. Lew drags her up the cobblestones and shoves her roughly inside the cabin. He picks her up and throws her on the ground. "Why are you doing this" she sobs. "Please stop!". Lew looks at her and says "ok" and rips her dress off. Ava screams on top of her lungs and starts to scramble away from Lew. out of the corner of her eye, Ava sees a empty wine bottle. she grabs it and twirls around to whack Lew over the head with it--she smiled gleefully as the glass shattered over Lew's head. he staggered back. Lew gets mad and screams. He drops his pants, jumps on her, and precedes to rape her. Ava closes her eyes tightly, and starts to pray to God, to get it over with. After a minuet, she realizes nothing is happening. In fact, she hears snoring. She thanks God that nothing has happened and tries to push him off her, but he's too heavy. She's pinned! She considers trying to wake him up, but then she might not get away. She could wait until he rolls over, or wait in the morning, and hope for the better. But she decides to wait till he rolls over with a little coaxing from her--he finally rolled over with a hard thud. Ava looks at him with utter disgust thinking 'why didn't I listen to Mary.' She grabbed his pants, and an old tattered sweater and ran outside into the silent, cold night. It started to rain. "The car" she thought. She had to get out of the woods. But the keys were in his shirt pocket. She sneaked back in the Shack, and heard the loud clang of the rain on the tin roof. She had to hurry! She crouched down and reached in the pocket. He hand grabbed her wrist. Luckily Ava came prepared--she has a tree branch in her hand and starts beating Lew unconscious. Until his groans subsided, Ava grabs the keys from his pocket and begins running for her life for the car. 'Thankgoodness I've been on the cross country team for the past 4 years' Ava thought to herself. She finally reaches the car and starts it up and drives home. She stashes the car in a Wal-Mart parking lot and runs home. She arrives home at five in the morning takes a shower, and goes to bed. At two, her father comes into the room. "Ava, wake up, there are cops at the door!" Ava woke up, and walk down to the front door, still half in her dream. The cop at the door looks at her, and says "Are you Ava Fields?" "Yes" she said lazily. Ma'am, you are under arrest for the murder of Lewis Walter Gatewaters. You have the right to remains silent. Everything you… Ava gasps and screams that it was "self defense!" but the cops ignore her and slap a pair of cuffs on her, and dragged her to the station. Year later: Broadcaster: Ava Fields is convicted for the murder of Lewis Walter Gatewaters. The murder weapon had her imprints on it, and her dress was there too. She claimed rape, but gynecologist experts said she was never penetrated. She had received life in prison. Mary switched off the TV. Ava didn't kill her, she knew. Mary had followed them to the cabin. After Mary saw Ava leave, she went in and hit him with the same stick with gloves on, and hit him in the back of the head. She had warned Ava. She got what she deserved she told herself. She got up and took a shower, and went to sleep. "Sweet Dreams Ava" she thought.
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The Perfect Date By: Lindsey Bartell Mikael Laporte
She barges through the door and jumps on her bed, and cries with glee. she picks up her puppy, butters--and then she grabs the phone to call her one and only true friend, Mary. She tells Mary all about her date with Lew. but Mary sue was really quiet over the phone because she had a secret crush on Lew, but Ava doesn't know. "That sound's awesome!" Mary responded. "What's the matter, you sound different?" "Oh nothing, just a bad day at school I guess" Mary responded. "Talk To Me!" Ava half squealed, still excited from the conversation with the boy of her dreams. Mary says "Nevermind..I hope you have a great date with Lew" and *click* she hung up on Ava. Ava shrugs and tosses the phone away from her. She gets up to decide on what to wear and to plan on how to sneak out of the house, past her parents. As she picked her dress, she thought back to the conversation she had with Lew. It was a strange conversation--Lew was acting all standoffish and shy. Could mean nothing, so Ava shoved the memory to the back of her head. Before she knew it, it was midnight and her parents were asleep. She opened her window and looked down to finds Mary at the bottom, hissing for her to come down. Ava was confused. What was Mary doing here? "I got to tell you something, get down here!" she hissed. Ava hoisted herself down and walk towards Mary. "What is it?" Mary shuffles her feet uncomfortably and says, "Lew's bad news--i don't want you to go out with him, pleassseee!" Ava thought to herself 'Mary's just jealous, i won't let her stop me.' Ava snapped, "Mary, stop worrying about me, you're not my mother" and shoves her aside. She stomped out to the drive way to find Lew relaxed, laying on his car, smoking a cigarette 2 blocks down. She wanted to shout out to him, but, caught herself, for she didn’t want to awaken her parents and ruin the night ahead. So she walked to the car, freezing to death and extremely annoyed at Mary. "Hey Lew!" Lew jumped, saw Ava, somehow managed to lose his footing on the ground, and fell on his butt. Ava ran to him laughing, thinking in the back of her head, “He’s harmless!”. Lew's face turned red as a lobster. He weakly laughs it off. he puts out his cigarette, pops the collar of his leather jacket and goes to open the door of his old car for Ava. While Lew was going around to his side, Ava took a quick look around his car and she finds an empty bottle of Red Wine. "Lew?". "Yeah, baby?". "Have you been drinking?". "No, why?" Lew asks with an innocent face. Ava points to the back of the car. "Oh, I'm sorry, this is my brother's car". "Oh....", Ava was quite for a while..."Can I ask you a favor?" Lew looked at her. "Sure". "I'm really sorry to ask you this but can I smell your breath? I'm sooo sorry, I just have trust issues...". "Sure, it's no problem". He leaned over from the driver's seat. His face was close to her's. Ava's heartbeat accelerated. He was getting closer. Her breathing deepened. Crazy thoughts were running through her head. "Could this be real?" she thought. "Is this really happening?" They were close enough to kiss, but would they? She so wanted to! …But no, instead, he blew his breath in her face. she backed away in disgust. it was the combination of liquor and garlic. Before she could say "Let me out, you're drunk," Lew wildly gunned the car down the street. Ava shouted at the top of her lungs "LET ME OUT!" and started hitting Lew on the shoulder. Lew struck her, and she backed off into her corner, sobbing. "Your gonna like it where I'm taking you!" and laughed. What seemed like for hours they drove, until he stopped the car in a wooded area, nothing to be seen but a cabin. He got out to ava's side of the car to try to pull her out--but ava was being difficult to him--she wouldn't get out, so lew had no choice but to yank her out by the hair. She screamed as she fell out, sobbing. Lew drags her up the cobblestones and shoves her roughly inside the cabin. He picks her up and throws her on the ground. "Why are you doing this" she sobs. "Please stop!". Lew looks at her and says "ok" and rips her dress off. Ava screams on top of her lungs and starts to scramble away from Lew. out of the corner of her eye, Ava sees a empty wine bottle. she grabs it and twirls around to whack Lew over the head with it--she smiled gleefully as the glass shattered over Lew's head. he staggered back. Lew gets mad and screams. He drops his pants, jumps on her, and precedes to rape her. Ava closes her eyes tightly, and starts to pray to God, to get it over with. After a minuet, she realizes nothing is happening. In fact, she hears snoring. She thanks God that nothing has happened and tries to push him off her, but he's too heavy. She's pinned! She considers trying to wake him up, but then she might not get away. She could wait until he rolls over, or wait in the morning, and hope for the better. But she decides to wait till he rolls over with a little coaxing from her--he finally rolled over with a hard thud. Ava looks at him with utter disgust thinking 'why didn't I listen to Mary.' She grabbed his pants, and an old tattered sweater and ran outside into the silent, cold night. It started to rain. "The car" she thought. She had to get out of the woods. But the keys were in his shirt pocket. She sneaked back in the Shack, and heard the loud clang of the rain on the tin roof. She had to hurry! She crouched down and reached in the pocket. He hand grabbed her wrist. Luckily Ava came prepared--she has a tree branch in her hand and starts beating Lew unconscious. Until his groans subsided, Ava grabs the keys from his pocket and begins running for her life for the car. 'Thankgoodness I've been on the cross country team for the past 4 years' Ava thought to herself. She finally reaches the car and starts it up and drives home. She stashes the car in a Wal-Mart parking lot and runs home. She arrives home at five in the morning takes a shower, and goes to bed. At two, her father comes into the room. "Ava, wake up, there are cops at the door!" Ava woke up, and walk down to the front door, still half in her dream. The cop at the door looks at her, and says "Are you Ava Fields?" "Yes" she said lazily. Ma'am, you are under arrest for the murder of Lewis Walter Gatewaters. You have the right to remains silent. Everything you… Ava gasps and screams that it was "self defense!" but the cops ignore her and slap a pair of cuffs on her, and dragged her to the station. Year later: Broadcaster: Ava Fields is convicted for the murder of Lewis Walter Gatewaters. The murder weapon had her imprints on it, and her dress was there too. She claimed rape, but gynecologist experts said she was never penetrated. She had received life in prison. Mary switched off the TV. Ava didn't kill her, she knew. Mary had followed them to the cabin. After Mary saw Ava leave, she went in and hit him with the same stick with gloves on, and hit him in the back of the head. She had warned Ava. She got what she deserved she told herself. She got up and took a shower, and went to sleep. "Sweet Dreams Ava" she thought.
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